The Secret Ghost City
I have 2 friends named
Manny and Aanny. My friends called me for lunch to their home for a small
party, as I was turning 18. I quickly dressed in an orange frilly frock and got
into their car. It was raining and the clouds covered the sun. It was a cold, windy
and dark day. It was a short distance, I got the umbrella, still I got drenched
badly, but I did not care, as I was excited to meet my friends.
Aanny asked me “Hey,
Sammy are you excited for lunch together?.
I said “Yes, of course!”
We passed by an open plot of land with only a little grass. Suddenly the car
made some noise and stopped. I quickly reached out to the door and tried to
open it, but it did not happen. So Aanny and Manny started to kick the front
glass. After a long time the glass finally broke and all of us got out. When we
looked around we saw the open plot of grass, in the middle of it stood a villa.
“Ssooooooooooooooo bbiiiiiggggg” said Aanny. Manny asked “Do you think it
is a good idea to go inside the villa and ask whether we could stay there for
the night?” to Aanny and Sammy. Suddenly someone said “I do not think you
should be going there.” As we turned we noticed a scary looking man in tattered
clothes passing by.
We had no option because
it was raining heavily. So we went to the villa and the door creaked open on
its own. When we entered we heard a soft whispering voice “You will be sorry
for entering.” That made me shiver. Suddenly the floor below vanished and we
all fell!
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!
When we realized this
fall was never ending. It felt like we were falling forever. After some time I
started getting thoughts like “Am I going to fall and break into pieces or am I
going to fall and get paralyzed?” Suddenly another scream broke my chain of
thoughts. Then I realized that it was Aanny who was screaming. I shouted back
“Are you OK? But there was no response.
Suddenly, I noticed that Manny and Aanny were
not around me. To my horror I could not even see my own body. “Oh, No! I was
totally invisible!”
Then I heard a shrill
noise that said “You would not live till tomorrow!!!” I could see ghost flying
around me, and skeletons shining and hanging on the walls. It was pitch dark
everywhere.
I also heard some scary
laughing sounds which for sure was coming from the skeletons. There were bones
on the walls. The skeletons seemed to be moving. I felt something started to
strangle me. I did not know how anybody could strangle me even though I was on
my doom fall. I was totally suffocated.
Then, to my surprise, I realized that Aanny
was strangling me and it looked like she was hypnotized. I was totally out of
breath, I was fainting. In that state of mind I also realized that Manny looked
hypnotized too. She was on the wall taking a pose like the skeletons.
I shouted “Manny ,are you OK?” She just
growled back at me.
But I didn’t have a lot
of time and I started thrashing around and hit a lantern. Lantern crashed and
broke. Its oil caught fire and it brought Aanny and Manny to their senses. Fire
spread and soon entire villa was on fire. I caught their hands and we dashed out
of the villa. We sat in our car and it started this time. We went back home and
were glad that we came out safe from this adventure.
Next evening when we
met, Manny said, "i am so glad that we ended this evil by burning the
entire villa. No one will have to suffer it again."
But that very evening
another car passes that open plot of land and stopped..
The
end??
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ReplyDeleteHi Nabhanya, your writings are very engaging! I love them. Keep weaving these stories my love!
ReplyDeleteThanks bua!
DeleteHey Nabhanya, it was a wonderful read. Thanks for writing this story. Looking forward to reading many more stories from you.
ReplyDeleteKid! I'm a fan of thriller and ghost stories. This is by far one of the best ones. You succeeded to take me that world Manny and Aanny were.
ReplyDeleteThe part that said "I was wondering if I would break to pieces or fall paralysed" beautiful way to represent the actual fearful thoughts one would have.
Bellissimo kiddo.
From you fan.
Divya raghuvamsini.
Very good ! Keep playing with the words, Little Wordsmith!
ReplyDelete:)
DeleteThat's really good work. Never stop writing!
ReplyDeleteGreat stuff! Keep it up!!😃
ReplyDeleteHey Rowling! Watch out!!!
ReplyDeleteThis little wordsmith is on her way to give you run for your money!!!!
All the best kid! The world is waiting for you!!!
:)
DeleteLoved reading it Nabhanya:) The part where they all fall down did remind me of Harry Potter! Waiting for the next one...All the best:)
ReplyDeleteThanks...
DeleteEven I like harry potter a lot...
No comment, just that that you should have improved on the ending
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